Last year it was snowing too much in the city. My parents can't drive because it there was too much snow. My parents had to wake up early and they had to walk to their center. Usually snowing is in the country, but last year it was snowing in the city too! My friends and I were very surprised because it was almost 100 years since it had snowed so much in the city. We had snow fight, made snow angels, and we drew some pictures in the snow. My puppy doesn't like the cold so my puppy didn't go outside. A man asked us to help him. We had to push his car because there was too much snowing. It was hard but we thought it was a good idea because it was helpful. Playing in the snow was very fun because it was so special to us since it was such heavy snow!
Sophie's corrected version:
Last year it was snowing too much in the city. My parents can't drive because there was too much snow. My parents had to wake up early and they had to walk to their center. A man asked us to help him. We had to push his car because there was too much snow. It was hard but we thought it was a good idea because it was helpful. Usually snowing is in the country, but last year it was snowing in the city too! My friends and I were very surprised because it was almost 100 years since it had snowed so much in the city. We had snow fights, made snow angels, and we drew some pictures in the snow. I wish my puppy had played with us but my puppy doesn't like the cold so my puppy didn't go outside. Playing in the snow was a lot of fun because it was so special to us since it was such heavy snow!
Sophie, the version you posted was not the last version we worked on. We will make the corrections together tomorrow.