Last winter vacation I went on a cruise to Jungdongjin, a famous place in korea, with my family.
We got on the boat and ate some snack.
I got seasick and tried to take a nap.
When I woke up, people shouted "Look at the sunrise. It is so beautiful."
I went out to the deck and tried to enjoy the scenery,too.
The sun was like rising from the sea.
It was shiny and beautiful.
Excellent writing! I like it!
We will discuss it on Wednesday.
2 things:
1) "... ,too"
2) "...was like rising..."