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Yesterday night, I was quite supprised when I found that her smile is so beautiful after washing makeup. Although I can see some wrinkles around her blue eyes, she looks like an angel came from heaven. However, she is now working with another man who is very kind and handsome. He is my son.
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Yesterday, it was my birthday so I ate a soup made by seaweed. In Korea, mother used to eat the seaweed soup when she deliver the baby ands the baby also eat it on every birthday. When I found my colleague's birthday, I gave small present with warm greeting, however they even don't know that it was my birthday. I was a little bit disappointed but, I was happy that I am still alive for 34 years since I was born. When I came back home, my wife prepared good beef BBQ for me. It was very delicious.
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Yesterday night, I was quite surprised when I found that her smile is so beautiful after washing (off her) makeup. Although I can see some wrinkles around her blue eyes, she looks like an angel
camefrom heaven. However, she is now working with another man who is very kind and handsome. He is my son.Diary:
Yesterday it was my birthday, so I ate a soup made by seaweed. In Korea, mother(s) used to eat
theseaweed soup whenshe(they) deliver(ed) (babies) and the baby also (ate) it on every birthday. When I found (out it was) my colleague's birthday, I gave (a) small present with (a) warm greeting; however, (he?) (didn’t even) know that it was my birthday. I was a little bit disappointed but, I was happy that I am still alive (after) 34 yearssince I was born. When I came back home, my wife prepared good beef BBQ for me. It was very delicious.Ok, pretty good Wontae. Again only small corrections here. Nice work! If you have any specific questions, please ask.