My protest
I want to protest about students leisure time.
Because the first reason is, in the leisure time we can do a lot of things. Like read a book, watch TV, play with friends, listen to music ……. But students don't do these kind of activity. Almost students do only one activity intensively like playing computer games. I think we should do more various activities in our leisure time.
The second reason is leisure time means the time we get after work. But some students get there leisure time before work. So if they spends long time to there leisure time, they can not do there work well.
The last reason I protest about students leisure time is because, these days students go to a lot of academies. So they do not have many leisure time. Leisure time is a good time to do lots of activities, but if you don't have leisure time you can not do many activities.
So I protest about students leisure time.
Jinny- Nice job writing about your protest! It is interesting how you chose a topic, and then picked a few different things about the topic that you wanted to protest. I liked how you organized these different points into paragraphs. I love your use of the word "intensively"in the first paragraph, what a great vocabulary word used in the exact right way!
Some general corrections:
-remember to use an apostrophe when a word is possessive, before the 's' with singular, after the 's' for plural. (example: "students' leisure time")
-use "their" instead of "there" when you are talking about possession. (example: "their leisure time")
-Can+not=cannot
The link below is a copy of your essay with all corrections highlighted.
Jinny! You are telling me!