Jin, 

I loved your essay about Kimchi! It is very informative. I really liked how you wrote about the history of some of the ingredients in Kimchi. It was really interesting to learn that it did not include hot peppers at first. Your writing style is great, I liked how you started with a question, and then talked about different aspects of the food. I made some small corrections in grammar, they are highlighted so that it is easy to find them. 

I hope to try Kimchi soon, it sounds really interesting and delicious!

All about Kimchi

   Do you know about Kimchi? Kimchi is one of the most traditional foods in Korea. Korean people can eat meals with only rice and cake. It's the same position as pasta in the United States. Nowadays Kimchi spreads really fast in the world because of the many advantages. And also Korea is trying to spread Kinchi to the world.

   Kimchi is made of cabbage with hot pepper. Many years ago. Kimchi was not spicy because there was not hot pepper. So they made Kimchi by using radish with salt. After the hot pepper was imported from the West,  people put that in Kimchi.  They made Kimchi in Winter and stored it to eat during the other seasons. In the past they stored them in the ground but nowadays we put Kimchi in the refrigerator.

   Many people love and eat Kimchi because there are a lot of good points. First Kimchi is goot for diet. Because there are lots of vegetables in Kimchi and Kimchi has a lot of diet fiber. So it helps to lose weight. Second it has fresh vegetables so it makes our appetites improves. The most important thing is it prevents many diseases like cancer, arteriosclerosis.

   Because of these many benefits, Kimchi is getting more and more popular. To inform the world of Kimchi, we tried to make a variety of Kimchi. For Westerners and children who cannot eat spicy food very well, we made Kimchi less spicy.  If you want to be healthy then try it. I'm sure you'll love it.