Please do not add homework as an attachment unless it is a media file like video or picture.  All text should be cut and pasted right onto the page because I cannot open hpw documents! Thanks!  Carrie

Very lively and imaginative!  I always look forward too reading your stories!  Maybe you should become a writer?

Here are my corrections.  If the word or letter is striked out, take it out.  If the word/letter is only red, leave it in:

Title : Camel with a hump!

Katherine : Hey!! Jinny!! You are a camel??? You have 3 humps!!Do not to use more than one exclamation point or question mark in homework assignments.  for online messages it is okay, but it is not standard English.
Jinny : Hey, don't say that!!
Katherine : Ha!! Ha!! but you have a very big hump!! And you have three of them!! Ha!! Ha!!!

- Like this, Katherine were was mean like this but, Jinny were was very kind!! -
- One day, Wwhen Jinny were climbing a mountain. -

Jinny : Oh~ it's so cold... And it's snowy!! I think I must go to that house and wait until the snow stops..

- Jinny goes to the small house and called, -

Jinny : Hello?? Anybody?? Let's just wait...

- Soon a monster came. -

Monster : Ha!! Ha!! My food had came!! Buy it's foot!! what does this mean: buy it's foot????
Jinny : Oh.... please... please... d..don't.......e...ea...eat....m.....me.......p...please....
Monster : Um... Then! sing or dance!! make me happy!!
Jinny : O...Okay....La~~ La~~ La~~~ very funny
Monster : Oh!! It sounds beautiful!!! Where does that amazing sound come from???
Jinny : Um...... It comes from my hump!!!
Monster : Oh~ I want that wonderful hump!! Then, I won't eat you and iI will give you a lots of gold!!!
Jinny : Um... alright!! take one!!  alright is slang, standard English is All right!  Please change here and elsewhere  see this link: http://dictionary1.classic.reference.com/help/faq/language/g03.html
Monster : Ok..... aberacadabera: make that hump on me!!!

- So Jinny has only 2 humps rich!! -(I'm not sure what you are trying to say here)
- But the monster knew that the hump doesn't help singing!! So the monster were was very mad.. -

Katherine : Oh~ Jinny~ you have only 2 humps.... and you are very rich...
Jinny : Yes, but why??
Katherine : Um... how did you did do everything??

- Jinny explained everything -

Katherine : Oh!! I see!! Ha!! Ha!! Bye!!!

- And run ran away. -
- One rainy day, Katherine climbed the mountain, and go went into the house. -

Monster : You!! You lied to me!!!! I wanted to catch you and punish you!!! But I can't              leave this house.... But how thank you!! You came by yourself!!!  Now let           (why such a big space here) my have my lunch!!! Ha!! Ha!!! Any last words??

- The monster thought Katherine is Jinny , But Katherine didn't know. -  Very clever twist!!! I didn't see that coming

Katherine : STOP!!! I will sing for you!!!
Monster : Alright then... I liked you song....
Katherine : L!!!!! A!!!!!! L!!!! A!!!!!
Monster : STOP!!!! Oh my ears!!! Hey you!!! yYou will be punished!! I will give you one terrible hump and you have to give me 10gold every week!!!
Katherine : f...five?? Oh!!! My!!!
Monster : If you don't iI will eat you!!

- Katherine wanted to earn gold but she just earned one terrible hump!!! -

Jinny : Ha!! Ha!!! Now you have a hump too!!!
Katherine : I'm sorry about everything.... I'm so sorry...
Jinny : It's okay!!! Now!!! dDon't be mean!!! Be nice and kind!!
Katherine : Ok.....

- So Katherine and Jinny be best friends and Katherine and Jinny both became kind and nice!!! -

-THE END-

Made by Katherine