This is my story!!
HIPPOPOTAMUS
Once, in Animal land there was a golf match. The players were Tamus, Runny, Mongy and Eleta. Every animal join to watch this big match! Right now, the golf players were practicing golf. Runny said to Tamus, "Hey! You! Fat hip! " Tamus tried to ignore her. But, Runny keep called him Fat hip! Tamus couldn't stand it. So he shouted, " Don't call me like that! I might be a little fat then you! But! I will win you in this match! "
Runny ignored him. But Tamus didn't care.( He were called called Fat hip since he was born! ) Nobody liked Tamus. Tamus wanted to fight with them but, he were weak and fat. So he had no choice. Now, the golf match begin! Every animal was cheering! About 1hour later, it finally ended. Runny won!!(762 Points) Tamus was very upset.( His score was Zero ). He started to say " Po, Po, " , " Po, Po, ". Runny shouted! "HEY EVERYBODY!! FAT HIP TAMUS IS STARTING TO SAY 'PO PO' NOW HE IS SAD! HA! HA!". She was right. When Tamus get sad, he started to say " PO PO ". Tamus ran to his own home and cried all day long. He started to pray to God. " God! Please! I don't want to be fat! I want to be light as a feather, So I could fly! Oh, Please God! And I want to fight who keeps laugh at me! Give me power God! PLEASE! " Soon he fell a sleep.
The next morning, Tamus woke up. He thought he were very light. So he saw his belly. But he was still fat.. Tamus was so disappointed! He tried to get out of bed. ( He were still sleepy so his eyes were almost shut. ) He walk to the river, he saw Runny! When Runny saw Tamus, she scream! and ran away! Tamus was so surprised! His eyes opened! He didn't know why Runny ran away. So he go to the river and see him self. He was surprised again! He has a very big wide wing! And he had very sharp teeth! Tamus was so happy! He flyed to the air, so every animal was so surprised, there mouth couldn't close! Tamus fly to the river again and see himself again and again. He couldn't believe it! " Now it's time for revenge.... ha, ha.... this is God's gift.." He said quietly.
First, he went to Runny's house. Runny was so afraid. Now, Tamus was stronger, and faster then Runny! Runny said very kindly, " Um... Tamus..... You look nice.... " Tamus carefully open his mouth... Runny saw his sharp white teeth. And he bited her ear! so her ear became long!! Next, Tamus went to see Mongy, He bite Mongy's tail! So it became long! Now Mongy and Runny can't go out side! They became ugly. So on, Tamus went to Eleta house, he bite her nose! So it became long! And Tamus go to other animals houses.... Every body hated Tamus! Now no one can go out from there house!! Soon the sunset... Tamus was so happy! This is the best day ever! Until it's very dark, Tamus keep look at him at the river. He was so happy and he fell asleep beside the river. The very next day, Tamus woke up and tried to fly. But soon he felft heavy! He was so nervous. He look at the river and see himself. " No wing! " He was hopeless... and sad... He look at the river over hundreds of times! STILL NO WINGS.... Tamus was upset but not much. He still have a big, sharp, white teeth.
About 2 years later, every animal got use to theirselves. So every animal can go out from there houses. But no one could laugh at Tamus. They were afraid. So nobody can go near the river anymore. Because, they didn't knew Tamus don't have wings. And they change there names. Because there faces or bodies has changed. Runny became Bunny, Mongy became Monkey and Eleta became Elephant and so on....... About 3 years later every body knew that Tamus has no wings but they also knew he has big sharp white teeth. Nobody were friends with Tamus. They want to look like they were not afraid of Tamus. So they called him " Hippopotamus ". Because ' Hip ' means he has fat hip. Popo means that when he is afraid, he say po, po. And last they put tamus, his name.
So tamus became hippopotamus!
-THE END-
Made by Katherine.
Very clever. I like the twist in the end, because I didn't realize this story was about how the hippopotamus got it's name, so it was a real surprise for me. I think Tamus is very mean, and feel sorry he got that way after someone was mean to him. I think it is better, that when someone is mean to you you shouldn't become mean too. What do you think?
Carrie
P.S. Remind me to give you homework on proper punctuation next week.
HIPPOPOTAMUS
Once, in Animal land there was a golf match. The players were Tamus, Runny, Mongy and Eleta. Every animal joined to watch this big match! Right now, the golf players were practicing golf. Runny said to Tamus, "Hey! You! Fat hip! " Tamus tried to ignore her. But, Runny keep called him Fat hip! Tamus couldn't stand it. So he shouted, " Don't call me like that! I might be a little fatter then than you! But!, I will win you in this match! "
Runny ignored him. But Tamus didn't care.( He were was called called Fat hip since he was born! ) Nobody liked Tamus. Tamus wanted to fight with them but, he were was weak and fat. So he had no choice. Now, the golf match begin began! Every animal was cheering! About 1hour later, it finally ended. Runny won!!(762 Points) Tamus was very upset.( His score was Zero ). He started to say " Po, Po, " , " Po, Po, ". Runny shouted! "HEY EVERYBODY!! FAT HIP TAMUS IS STARTING TO SAY 'PO PO' NOW HE IS SAD! HA! HA!". She was right. When Tamus get sad, he started to say " PO PO ". Tamus ran to his own home and cried all day long. He started to pray to God. " God! Please! I don't want to be fat! I want to be light as a feather, so I could fly! Oh, Please God! And I want to fight whoever keeps laughing at me! Give me power God! PLEASE! " Soon he fell asleep.
The next morning, Tamus woke up. He thought he were was very light. So he saw his belly. But he was still fat.. Tamus was so disappointed! He tried to get out of bed. (He were was still sleepy so his eyes were almost shut). He walk to the river, and he saw Runny! When Runny saw Tamus, she screamed! and ran away! Tamus was so surprised! His eyes opened! He didn't know why Runny ran away. So he go went to the river and to see for himself. He was surprised again! He has a very big wide wing! And he had very sharp teeth! Tamus was so happy! He flyed to the air, so every animal was so surprised, there their mouth couldn't close! Tamus fly flew to the river again and see himself again and again. He couldn't believe it! " Now it's time for revenge.... ha, ha.... this is God's gift," he said quietly.
First, he went to Runny's house. Runny was so afraid. Now, Tamus was stronger, and faster then Runny! Runny said very kindly, " Um... Tamus..... You look nice.... " Tamus carefully opened his mouth... Runny saw his sharp white teeth. And he bited her ear! so her ear became long!! Next, Tamus went to see Mongy. He bite Mongy's tail! So it became long! Now Mongy and Runny can't go outside! They became ugly. So on, Tamus went to Eleta's house, he bite her nose! So it became long! And Tamus go went to other animal's houses.... Everybody hated Tamus! Now no one can go out from there their house!! Soon the it was sunset... Tamus was so happy! This is the best day ever! Until it' was very dark, Tamus keep kept looking at him at the river. He was so happy and he fell asleep beside the river. The very next day, Tamus woke up and tried to fly. But soon he felft heavy! He was so nervous. He look at the river and see saw himself. " No wing! " He was hopeless... and sad... He look at the river over hundreds of times! STILL NO WINGS.... Tamus was upset but not much. He still have a big, sharp, white teeth.
About 2 years later, every animal got used to theirselves. So every animal can go out from there their houses. But no one could laugh at Tamus. They were afraid. So nobody can could go near the river anymore. Because, they didn't knew Tamus don't have wings. And they change there their names. Because there their faces or bodies has have changed. Runny became Bunny, Mongy became Monkey and Eleta became Elephant and so on....... About 3 years later every body knew that Tamus has no wings but they also knew he has big sharp white teeth. Nobody were was friends with Tamus. They wanted to look like they were not afraid of Tamus. So they called him " Hippopotamus ". Because ' Hip ' means he has a fat hip. Popo means that when he is afraid, he says "po, po". And last they put Tamus, his name.
So Tamus became hippopotamus!
-THE END-
Made by Katherine.