I had a dog and a cat. They were Hanel, a mutt Maltese and Ongeun, a mutt cat. Though their looks were very lovely and cute, their nick name were dumb and dumber. Hanel was so gluttonous. One day Hanel got into the grapes box and it ate all. So it was too heavy to escape and it spent all day. Ongeun always liked looking for warm place like above TV and electric rice cooker. They are very narrow and small so it was used to fall every time. Sometimes Ongeun got hurt but it forgot easily. Their mistakes happened in series. My family called them " Dum and Dumber".
Jenniffer-
I really like your story about your two former pets. I can picture them being lazy and eating a lot. They had such funny personalities! I liked how you used the word "gluttonous", what a great vocabulary word. Remember to make sure that each sentence is expressing all the information you want to get across. For example, in the sentence, "So it was too heavy to escape and it spent all day." What did it spend all day doing? Or where did it spend all day? There must be a bit more information so we know exactly what you mean.
I attached the file with all of your corrections. Overall, I think it is a great story! Thanks for sharing!