Once upon a time there was a man named Mohn Nee. He loved money like his name.
One day Mohn helped a old man carrying a heavy bag. The old man was so thankful to Mohn. So the old man said to Mohn.
"Oh, Thank you! Young man, I will attend to your wish."
"umm.. I want a lot of money!"
"Hmm.. Then I will give you some money. Follow me."
Mohn was so happy. So he followed the old men. They arrived at the old man's house. In the old man's house there was a lot of money on the floor. The old man gave Mohn a big bag.
"Young man, put these money inside this bag. Then I will give you all of the money you put it in this bag. I'll give you 10 minutes."
Mohn Nee started to put the money inside the bag. He put a lot of money in the bag. The bag gets bigger and bigger. 9 minutes later the bag was filled with money. But Mohn Nee wanted more money. So he put more money inside it. But..
'zzzz'
The bag ripped because there was so much money. So the money all got out from the bag. On that moment it was over 10 minutes. So Mohn Nee cannot get any money.
This story lesson : Don't be a greedy person.
Jinny, what a great story! Did you make it up? Or did you hear it somewhere?
I love the play on words with the man's name "Mohn Nee" and the word "money". I also love how you expressed the bag ripping with a sound effect. Also, I am happy that you remembered to share the lesson/moral of the story.
There are a few sentences that need correction:
1. So he followed the old men.
2. Young man, put these money inside the bag.
3. The bag gets bigger and bigger.
4. So the money all got out from the bag.
5. So Mohn Nee cannot get any money.
Can you find the mistakes in these sentences? Hint: think about the tense (such as past and present) of the story, make sure it all matches!
Thanks for sharing the story! Great job!